Monday, November 19, 2012

Many quiet days

Here's what I think has happened. I started using this blog as a writing forum, and loved it. Then I moved to Burbank, and used the blog as a record of that change. During the past two months, I have tasted every activity offered here with the exception of exercise and art (although I did use the treadmill once, and last week to an expressive art class - even the teacher thought that was a redundant choice of words). The poetry class (since there's a facilitator) and the writing group (no teacher, just us) have captured me, and I've been pouring my words out there instead of here. Tonight I'll combine the two and give you a story. The way we do it is pick by number from a list of story prompts, and then write for 20 minutes, and include the prompt sentence in our story. Then we read to each other - no criticism, just encouragement. The prompt for today was the sentence: "Every move hinted at a brutal power restrained." Here's the story:


The cat had been left in the apartment, alone, for the holidays. The dog had gone to the kennel, but that cat only knew he was gone. The person had gone on vacation, but the cat only knew she was gone. Another person came in twice a day to replenish food, check the cat box, open or close the balcony door, and give a few cursory pats, but when no purr responded, the pats became fewer and farther between. The first few days, the cat slept.  Nothing was very interesting, so he slept. He didn’t find the food person particularly interesting, so he slept.The food was briefly interesting, but with just a few bites the cat found it dull, so he ate the barest necessary, and slept some more.

Three days of sleeping left him oddly restless, and he prowled the apartment, looking for life. The food person came and the cat prowled. When the balcony door was open, he prowled outside and looked disgustedly at the birds. He prowled the bed at night. He slept fitfully now, slightly aware of missing the warmth of the person.

Three days of prowling tuned his muscles and nerves to a fine pitch. His tail began to switch behind him, and he hunted for unknown prey. His sleeping was filled with dreams of battle and of kill. Dream cats cowered before him, and dream mice, lizards, birds were unable to escape his claws, which were growing longer and sharper.

On the seventh day, wound as tight as a wire on a spool, he was prowling the balcony and spotted a small moving object. He chased it into a corner where he held it down with one paw, and sniffed. He had no word for this thing, but his dreams of hunt and kill became awake to him. On all the seventh day he toyed with the creature, and in his mind it became ferocious and dangerous, and the cat became ferocious and dangerous in return. Every move hinted at a brutal power restrained.

The food person came in the evening of the seventh day, but could not entice the cat inside. Attempts to pick him up were met with rage and tearing claws. The person left food, left the balcony door open and left the apartment with shivers of a cold and unnamed unease.

On the seventh night, the cat paced his prey. It became slower, and slower, and finally the cat pounced and killed and ate. And finally slept.

On the eighth day, he awoke from his sleeping, and found a tremendous power in his heart and body. He looked at the food person with a sneer and a growl, and the person dropped his jaw when he saw a creature nothing like the one he’d left the night before. The cat was large, skinny and rangy. His pacing exuded brutal power, and his feet pounded like storm troopers on the floor. His open mouth issued sounds no cat had made before and the person was struck with terror. With barely a glance at the dry food and water, and without pausing, the person fled through the door.



2 comments:

  1. Good question. First I said no, I was the first person, and then later in the night I realized that in our stories, as in our dreams, we are all the characters. So, yes, I am the cat and both people.

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